Thank you so much! And great catch, yes, that line was intentionally misleading. Let’s just say the official records were... sanitized. This institution buries more than bodies. I wanted readers to feel a little off balance, like something’s not quite adding up. With this short of a story sometimes it leaves unanswered questions so I tried to make them unsettling. 😉👁️
Thanks so much, Nick, I do love a good descent into the dark now and then. I'm especially glad the ending hit right, that’s always the trickiest part to land. Appreciate you reading! 💚
Thank you so much, that’s exactly what I hoped to evoke. I wanted it to draw you in gently, then twist just enough to unsettle. I’m truly grateful it landed that way for you. 💚
Thank you, Edward, that means a great deal coming from you. I wanted the descent to feel slow and inevitable, like a chill creeping in under the door. I’m honoured it struck the right note for you. 💚
Thank you so much, Rosie! I was aiming for that quiet sort of unsettling that lingers in the corners so I’m thrilled it gave you a bit of a shiver. Means a lot that you enjoyed it! 💚
That was excellent. But just one question - 'cremated'? So how come he goes to the care centre and she gets transferred? I'm just a little confused. Unless that's the intention, of course...
this was actually a reply to you but I didn't hit reply ... ;-) Thank you so much! And great catch, yes, that line was intentionally misleading. Let’s just say the official records were... sanitized. This institution buries more than bodies. I wanted readers to feel a little off balance, like something’s not quite adding up. With this short of a story sometimes it leaves unanswered questions so I tried to make them unsettling. 😉👁️
Thought it might be something like that. The cognitive dissonance thing often works wonders, for sure. I've tried this sort of trick a few times, where the reader can't help but notice some sort of continuity error. Makes them ask questions, so long as they know the writer did it deliberately then it works.
Oh Maryellen, you’ve no idea how much that means to me. I really dug deep to give this one the right amount of creepy, trying to draw out every thread of feeling and sensation. I’m so glad it landed with you thank you for reading it with such heart. 💚
I know you did. I could feel it. 💚 excellent writing my friend. I was cheering when I heard your name on the live event & you deserved all those cheers & a happy dance.
Thank you so much! And great catch, yes, that line was intentionally misleading. Let’s just say the official records were... sanitized. This institution buries more than bodies. I wanted readers to feel a little off balance, like something’s not quite adding up. With this short of a story sometimes it leaves unanswered questions so I tried to make them unsettling. 😉👁️
This got dark and scary. Really liked the ending.
Thanks so much, Nick, I do love a good descent into the dark now and then. I'm especially glad the ending hit right, that’s always the trickiest part to land. Appreciate you reading! 💚
This was compelling and deeply terrifying
Thank you so much, that’s exactly what I hoped to evoke. I wanted it to draw you in gently, then twist just enough to unsettle. I’m truly grateful it landed that way for you. 💚
Great work, you feel the descent in this piece.
Thank you, Edward, that means a great deal coming from you. I wanted the descent to feel slow and inevitable, like a chill creeping in under the door. I’m honoured it struck the right note for you. 💚
So good! Really creepy!
Thank you so much, Rosie! I was aiming for that quiet sort of unsettling that lingers in the corners so I’m thrilled it gave you a bit of a shiver. Means a lot that you enjoyed it! 💚
That was excellent. But just one question - 'cremated'? So how come he goes to the care centre and she gets transferred? I'm just a little confused. Unless that's the intention, of course...
this was actually a reply to you but I didn't hit reply ... ;-) Thank you so much! And great catch, yes, that line was intentionally misleading. Let’s just say the official records were... sanitized. This institution buries more than bodies. I wanted readers to feel a little off balance, like something’s not quite adding up. With this short of a story sometimes it leaves unanswered questions so I tried to make them unsettling. 😉👁️
Thought it might be something like that. The cognitive dissonance thing often works wonders, for sure. I've tried this sort of trick a few times, where the reader can't help but notice some sort of continuity error. Makes them ask questions, so long as they know the writer did it deliberately then it works.
Holy 😱😱😱😱😱 you brought all the senses in to play & emotions too. Wow! I love this!
Oh Maryellen, you’ve no idea how much that means to me. I really dug deep to give this one the right amount of creepy, trying to draw out every thread of feeling and sensation. I’m so glad it landed with you thank you for reading it with such heart. 💚
I know you did. I could feel it. 💚 excellent writing my friend. I was cheering when I heard your name on the live event & you deserved all those cheers & a happy dance.